So far, I look forward to the picnic day on the very last days of school for the year! There are always LOADS of games on picnic day like the water fights, treasure hunts, and best of all... the slippery slide!
We have been learning about descriptive writing and writing about objects or people, for example; The water flows peacefully around the bathing rocks, as it moves hesitantly through the swift rapids. Tree's on either side of the gleaming river tickle each other, with outstretched fingers, as it seems that they are laughing through gasping breathes, as they move slightly in the light summery breeze.
Or a paragraph about the Christchurch Cathedral Church: The archaic church lies in a helpless heap on the crumbling ground. The thick wall of dust smoothers those who dare to enter the area surrounding the limp rubble that is scattered across the broken surface of the Cathedral Square. The air is limited as frightened people scramble to safety away from the collapsing buildings. The smell in the air leaves a depressing reminder of the horror of what happened just seconds before. The screams of people who have lost loved ones, and the terrifying cries of those who are trapped under the fallen buildings, surround the horrified crowd, that are trapped in the heart of the Cathedral. The strong smell of thick smoke deepens as people run away from the lifeless church, leaving a deadly, quiet silence...
Descriptive paragraphs need:
To be able to 'paint' a picture in the readers mind
Good describing words, verbs, nouns, and adjectives
To have the senses: Sight, hearing, taste, smell or feel.
Different startings ( not just THE, THEY or IT )... It makes the paragraphs seem boring.
Have similies, personifications, alliterations, and metaphors
Words that describe something. For example: Avoid words like pretty, nice, cool, good, ( Use REAL words, to try to provide the reader with information that will be needed to 'paint' a picture in the readers mind
To make the reader feel like they were there
To have a variation of sentences, like simple sentences, complex sentences, and compound sentences.
So far, I look forward to the picnic day on the very last days of school for the year! There are always LOADS of games on picnic day like the water fights, treasure hunts, and best of all... the slippery slide!
We have been learning about descriptive writing and writing about objects or people, for example; The water flows peacefully around the bathing rocks, as it moves hesitantly through the swift rapids. Tree's on either side of the gleaming river tickle each other, with outstretched fingers, as it seems that they are laughing through gasping breathes, as they move slightly in the light summery breeze.
Or a paragraph about the Christchurch Cathedral Church: The archaic church lies in a helpless heap on the crumbling ground. The thick wall of dust smoothers those who dare to enter the area surrounding the limp rubble that is scattered across the broken surface of the Cathedral Square. The air is limited as frightened people scramble to safety away from the collapsing buildings. The smell in the air leaves a depressing reminder of the horror of what happened just seconds before. The screams of people who have lost loved ones, and the terrifying cries of those who are trapped under the fallen buildings, surround the horrified crowd, that are trapped in the heart of the Cathedral. The strong smell of thick smoke deepens as people run away from the lifeless church, leaving a deadly, quiet silence...
Descriptive paragraphs need:
To be able to 'paint' a picture in the readers mind
Good describing words, verbs, nouns, and adjectives
To have the senses: Sight, hearing, taste, smell or feel.
Different startings ( not just THE, THEY or IT )... It makes the paragraphs seem boring.
Have similies, personifications, alliterations, and metaphors
Words that describe something. For example: Avoid words like pretty, nice, cool, good, ( Use REAL words, to try to provide the reader with information that will be needed to 'paint' a picture in the readers mind
To make the reader feel like they were there
To have a variation of sentences, like simple sentences, complex sentences, and compound sentences.